Thursday, November 10, 2011

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In conclusion, is it really worth it? That’s all I want to know. Do coaches, administrators, university officials, boosters and players all think it is worth it to cheat? More and more of these NCAA infractions are getting brought to the table and when the school, coach or player gets caught, they have nothing to say. It is not worth taking the money if you’re a player, or paying the player if you’re a coach or booster. Play by the rules, and the rules won’t play you.
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When it comes down to it, is it really worth it? All the cheating, lying, scheming and under-the-table payments almost always come back to bite the cheater in the butt. The player loses all of his accomplishments like Reggie Bush; the coach loses his job and his reputation is forever tarnished like Jim Tressel; and programs like SMU will need more than twenty years to even field a semi-respectable team. The NCAA is instituting major penalties on any form of cheating to show that anyone who breaks the rules will be severely punished. So, basically, play by the rules, and the rules won’t play you.

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